and we became.
The more that we became,
the more i was,
to you.
And you grew from me,
love?
whilst i remained stagnant,
indifferent.
However
not in mind, thriving from yours,
Brilliant i say!
Intense listening,
Your words did enrapture me.
We were trapped,
I in a caged enamoured state,
my mind longing more pleasure
and you a blind love,
unreturned.
4 comments:
Marvelous. I truly feel that the narrator believes it is better to have loved and lost then never to have loved before.
It is clear in this piece that the narrator and the writer really reflect one in the same personable characteristics which adds to the emotions experienced by the reader.
You truly have completed yet another enthralling piece to which past torment and anguish is emerging into something beautiful and worthwhile.
Truly looking forward to more poetry relating to this topic and specific genre.
True Lover
Of Canadian Poetry
P.S. I was also pondering if you had written any poetry during the relationship which may contrast your present state. It would be excellent to juxtapose the two realms in the future. Just a thought.
Let me know what you think.
I have written poetry when i was in the relationship, unfortunately I have misplaced the notepad in which i wrote all my poetry for that period of time. I am still looking for it as I know it's somehwere in my house. When i find it i will post some for you to view. We will see you can notice a difference in the states of mind. However i would like to comment on this poem aswell as 'Past reflections'. Both of these poems are separate from other poems concerning a loved one. These two are about a relationship where one person has fallen out of love with the other person, but still deeply cares. There is no physical desire to be with the person on the narrators part while the other is still in love with the narrator. It is a very hard position to be in when one does not wish to hurt, or blindside the person who has become the narrators close friend moreso than a lover.
p.s. your comments on 'My release' have stirred a response from another reader. It may be worthwhile to check out.
Danielle,
Thank you for distinguishing the difference between those two pieces. It is very interesting, as a reader, to be able to read a piece of literature, make my own personal decisions regarding the piece, and then being able to hear the writer's personal insights. I must admit that I really am enjoying these publications. I look forward to hearing more about your pieces in the future.
True Lover of �Eastern� Canadian Poetry
P.S. I have also responded to the "My Release" dispute and I must admit that I am glad to see another person interested in your work. Hopefully, he will continue reading your poetry and be as enthralled as I am.
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